"Keep Your Friends Close..." Feedback

This was gold. You started the RP with a bang and continued through it with a very easy flow through to the end. I honestly feel no words were wasted. Your character had a strong motivation that made her push the situation and thus set high stakes which really pulls the audience into the importance of the incoming results, solid story telling that was very match relevant, great use of CD, and stamped your intention emphatically without being too blunt or obtuse. These are the kinds of scenes that can really be the basis of something special.

Then you did a great job on the shoot, I could almost hear your character's inflection, you presented and reacted very organically to the nature of the match. You even took mention of events from matches (that lack of interference from your valet was very intentional by the by, not sure if I made note of it in the match, but glad you noticed), which is something I've seen over looked too often.

I also liked your use of description from the biographer character, very strong setting with little description by using a outside voice kind of putting the audience in his feet, thus letting them know what to feel to a degree.

I would loved to see more on Umeji, but with the limitations I understand that only so much can go in. Good work this week.