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Post by Mr. Wright on Jun 8, 2016 18:06:40 GMT -6
I think I've got this guy down.
This was a special Ppv role play, I don't expect them to be this long normally. But I tried to merge that shoot right in there as organically as possible.
Also spacing. Let me know how it looks on your end. Looks good on mine.
And I know that people like color coding. I hope I don't lose points for not doing that. I do this all from word to my phone to the boards. It's hard enough coding with just the [ i ] and [ br ].
Anything would help. Thanks.
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Post by Spencer Adams on Jun 12, 2016 1:25:03 GMT -6
This was a drastic improvement from the previous RPs as Wright. At first, it read as an interesting character who I wanted to tune into to see him become bigger than being this kind of shady question mark of a character. In a single RP, you just unloaded and really brought it. Shoot was there after advises and was pretty solid. The story development was really strong. Sorry for not getting back sooner on this. Anyways, you're definitely moving in the right direction with the character. Keep at it, man.
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