"Family Dispute" Feedback

I'll start with "Part 1 - Allen Walker"

I feel you've really found Allen's voice here and you're using it to full effect. He sounds confident thrashing his opponents verbally - something I feel you were afraid to delve into as L - and he sells the fact he's going to kick the mother shit out of his opposition.

One thing I'm not entirely sold on is the side characters - barring Terra (but I'll get into that in a little bit). Vinny and Lance just kind of seem like they're there...I mean, they have dialogue but I found myself tuning out of it a lot, not a knock, it just seemed like they didn't do much to carry the narrative. That could come back to Allen's interactions with them though. He's leaning more narcissistic in his tendencies, so he would almost barely acknowledge them when they're speaking, but Allen found himself providing exposition on a lot of stuff to Vinny/Lance. They should be trying to vehemently defend their character to him, not the other way around.

With Terra, things should be different. Allen and Terra are both dominant personalities, but in these duos, there's always a submissive partner. Allen is bolsterous, so I feel like Terra would definitely submit to his more dominant personality, but her dialogue didn't really convey that.

Overall, this piece was very good! Just a few tweaks I would make here and there! Great job!