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Post by Jack "The Crack" Schlongson on Oct 15, 2017 20:03:59 GMT -6
For those who have bothered to read the RP, no pressure, but feedback would be dope.
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Post by hippoharry on Oct 15, 2017 23:59:37 GMT -6
Mane, you got me teary eyed on this tearjerker. I want to say improve things, but alot just brushed my cheek and let me feel like an old dog on the porch, just chewing the same bone. You are like way into the mind and it works, mane.
For me, I wanna get more of his stuff. Maybe even talk less of porn and do that action. Get the gravy while it's hot, ya know. JAck is what we want to be, a fluid voice, you know. What more do we need but a place that sweet voice to hit off.
Champion stuff was my fav because it was like Iron Mike, biting ears cause he couldn't let go of being THE badass. Gots to run the mountain, it's a pun if want it to be, and no else gets your peak. None shall pass! Mane, keep being you, and that belt will have your pic on it. Loved that shit, tho. You are great at writing this dude. Don't stop, like, ever, k. Hope some o that shit was dope.
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Post by Bonnie Blue on Oct 16, 2017 4:57:44 GMT -6
I think Harry summed it up pretty well. Solid work, as always. Personally, I like the juxtaposition between Jack on camera vs off camera; it makes him seem more alive and real.  |
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