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Post by Mr. Wright on Jun 3, 2016 22:37:41 GMT -6
If I can just get some feedback on this hitch is appreciate it. Trying a new style of prose as well as a new character.
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Post by Leviathan on Jun 5, 2016 9:06:50 GMT -6
I'll keep it short and sweet for ya bro!
Pros:
- great character development! I feel like we got a good grasp of Mr. Wright and who he is as a person!
- the new prose seems to be working for you! I can still see bits and pieces of your previous writing style slipping through, but as somebody who personally mixes up 1st and 3rd person writing all the time, it didn't really detract from the piece for me at all
- fun story! I feel like I know the twist already, but maybe there's a different twist coming instead? We'll see! I'm excited to see it!
Cons:
- too much spacing! I don't know if that's how you do it to make the piece seem meatier, but it kind of detracted from the piece for me. Tighten it up!
- not enough shoot! We're all still relatively new to each other, but if you could come up with a few more things to hammer on your opponent for, it will help you in the long run! A nice 50/50 split always works for me in the CD/Shoot department
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Post by Mr. Wright on Jun 5, 2016 10:56:25 GMT -6
The spacing happens from moving from word to here. On word it looks perfect. When I copy it it looks good. When I post it lengthens out. I hate it but the only way I know to fix it is to manually go through the rp and fix it after I post it in edit.
The wierd thing is that it's fine when I go from my phone to the boards. I don't know.
Anyway. Thanks man. I appreciate the feedback. And as for the shoot. I've determined that I don't find it fun to write shoot right now. I don't know why. Hopefully it will come back. But I will work
On enjoying it again.
Really. Thanks. I hope the twist is worth it.
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Post by Spencer Adams on Jun 5, 2016 11:14:38 GMT -6
The spacing happens from moving from word to here. On word it looks perfect. When I copy it it looks good. When I post it lengthens out. I hate it but the only way I know to fix it is to manually go through the rp and fix it after I post it in edit. The wierd thing is that it's fine when I go from my phone to the boards. I don't know. Anyway. Thanks man. I appreciate the feedback. And as for the shoot. I've determined that I don't find it fun to write shoot right now. I don't know why. Hopefully it will come back. But I will work On enjoying it again. Really. Thanks. I hope the twist is worth it. That same weird spacing thing happens to me too. Also, I'll get feedback to you today. Have to catch up on RPs a bit still. |
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Post by Jay Omega on Jun 5, 2016 11:31:57 GMT -6
When pasting to the board, be sure to click the "BBCode" button first. After pasting hit "Preview", then you can go through and fix any spacing errors before posting.
Alternately, check your settings in WordPad, and make sure it's not automatically adding a 10 point space after paragraphs.
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