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Post by Deleted on Sept 8, 2017 5:16:35 GMT -6
Rip, tear, and rend my work at your pleasure.
Also, there's a cheese platter and three-bean salad... if you want some.
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Post by Kaz on Sept 8, 2017 7:46:15 GMT -6
There are honestly no true complaints to be made about your work. It works stylistically and every word seems to build Umeji and serve a purpose.
The only gripe I have is being in the RS division puts you in a box. If you were allowed to unload, nothing barred? I do not envy being your opponent.
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Post by Jack "The Crack" Schlongson on Sept 11, 2017 16:44:27 GMT -6
Solid work, mang. That shoot was magic. Your ability to work within the 1000 word limit is quite impressive, balancing character, shoot, CD, and voice inside of a minimalist approach is honestly something a lot of people could take note of. One thing that is hard to nail in any word count is atmosphere, and with simple image, you do a great job of it. The only detraction I can give is the double spacing, I've always hated how the forum spaces shit when you paste it in the preview box, but that's not really a problem with the RP at all haha.
Great stuff, I agree with Kaz, if you ever stepped outside (or if I stepped inside RS) I would be quite worried haha.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 11, 2017 19:33:39 GMT -6
Yeah, I get excited and stop editing the last qtr; also, I hate that forum pasting n' spacing. I know it takes a second - but we're living in a precious vacuum afterall. Thank you guys, I really appreciate your time!
- U['s puppet master]
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Post by Jack "The Crack" Schlongson on Sept 11, 2017 19:37:47 GMT -6
Yeah, I get excited and stop editing the last qtr; also, I hate that forum pasting n' spacing. I know it takes a second - but we're living in a precious vacuum afterall. Thank you guys, I really appreciate your time! - U['s puppet master] One little trick I learned some time ago is to click on 'BBCode' and paste it there, that way it'll be normally spaced when you post it. |
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Post by Deleted on Sept 11, 2017 20:03:02 GMT -6
nice...
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Post by Jack "The Crack" Schlongson on Sept 11, 2017 20:16:11 GMT -6
Ellipses always make me feel like I said something wrong haha. I hope I didn't misunderstand you when I made my reply. |
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Post by Deleted on Sept 11, 2017 22:32:25 GMT -6
Nah man, it was smooth like Coltrane.
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