Diametrically Opposed Feedback

Thank you for the feedback. I appreciate it.

I can already tell this is going to be a long one - so here's a song to keep it company:



Was chomping at the bit to talk about this one. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Outright kill shots - that was my first impression. An elegance and control of language that keeps to its point, or more, two points. This is what we expect of a concise argument and you play it well. You also utlized plenty inside your 1k goal, which made it more impressive. Thumbs up there.

Delving into the voice, we find a mixture of intelligence and hyperawareness. It breeds a confident character that leaves no stone unturned. I want to figure out more about here - another sign of concise language and usage to shape the voice. Now, I expected a few more accents to make it less mysterious. Perhaps that's what drew the most was its sealed off presence - I'll get to that soon - in a void. Improvements will come as there are more goals than a single match to aim for. Hence why it would be a little early to gripe about motivations, reason, ect. (I have not read your bio since it first appeared, so I'm only basing my opinions off the promo). Although we could see more desire in future rps. Something to humanize, even to a slight extent, why we [an enraptured audience] should beleive her. Ultimately, she will evolve as a verbal gladiator and let us know everything she's about.

I liked the interludes. I can't remember if you italicized them or not, but that would help them be more etherral (not an important change, if at all, only my opinion). This is where I think the promo could use a quick buttress or two: setting/existence. I personally enjoy when we see the media of production. I realize that it can sap from your 1 k allotment - totally get it - but I was hoping a source of her message. I liked the galatic/otherworldly context in Elina's actions; as such, I wondered more about her presence in the actual scene. Mind those are opinons and shouldn't be an end all to your direction. It just seemed a little more anchoring could help express her intentions and place. Fan ultimately have a say in the ring. Otherwise, we exist in a competitive vacuum without the fantasy of match writing (what I think you have knack for, if interested for upcoming shows).

I always bludgeon about setting because I'm equally as guilty. 1K really limits how many elements we can stack. Also, as is custom, we always encourage incoming talent to take advantage of every facet to our site. The expanded universe could be the best place to flesh out the innermost details our weekly vignettes cannot. Be it Twitter, or random, off-site chicanery, those can be your best resource with Elina. Honestly though, I'm curious see and read more about her. Anyways, it's a helpful platform for those looking say more w/n the Rising Stars Divison.

For now, I think that's all I can cover. Elina is an intriguing new voice that I'm sure every is curious to see more of in the future. Her voice is powerful and cuts foos like butter. Keep up that great work, and feel free to apply any, or none, of my musings. Critics are the bane of creativity...