L Verez {L-7}
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Open minds and positive vibes!
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Post by L Verez {L-7} on Jul 15, 2017 11:37:22 GMT -6
I was a bit busy while I was writing, so I couldn't double check everything like I usually do. I also tried to meld my story and shoot together a little better this time. Let me know what you think I still need to improve on.
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Post by Kaz on Jul 15, 2017 12:29:39 GMT -6
It was good, one thing I would do is kind of try and seperate yourself from that pre built Mass Effect universe. Seems to fanfic if anything lol. I would try and build you own universe, alien races, galaxies, etc.
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L Verez {L-7}
Hypermedia Champion
Open minds and positive vibes!
Posts: 289
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Post by L Verez {L-7} on Jul 15, 2017 12:46:28 GMT -6
It was good, one thing I would do is kind of try and seperate yourself from that pre built Mass Effect universe. Seems to fanfic if anything lol. I would try and build you own universe, alien races, galaxies, etc. Yeah, I don't plan on making it too much like Mass Effect, besides the two characters I added, and from time to time, I'll have L go Mass Effect type missions, but not too often. Thanks for the feedback! |
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