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Post by "Relentless" Andre Holmes on May 21, 2016 17:51:07 GMT -6
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Post by Spencer Adams on May 21, 2016 18:48:43 GMT -6
The biggest strength here was importance. This is a world title tournament and I think that this was crafted in a way that reflects that. I really like that the different parts of it came together in a way that made it all just feel very significant. I don't have any major negatives with this rp (as I won't with any week 1 rp). The bit of advice is to simply look to build more. I think that you're headed in the right direction in this fed, it's just about grinding and looking for ways that you personally feel you can improve. Good rp here, man.
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Post by "Relentless" Andre Holmes on May 22, 2016 0:05:42 GMT -6
Appreciate it man. Thanks for the heads up.
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Post by "Mr. God" Benjamin Atreyu on May 26, 2016 20:02:36 GMT -6
Andre, beast as always. What I really liked is that despite having to start in a new place with the same character, you made it feel completely natural, as if you've never needed to know more about Andre besides the fact that he is indeed, without a doubt, relentless, like it spoke to his history as a competitor.
You managed to use your introduction to create a singular idea in the RP that was more than just an introduction. You showed a past in the industry, where you were at mentally, of course, but used that to show how, when the industry came knocking at your door, you had a very difficult choice to make that spoke about your character as a person, and when you made that choice, what it said about you as a competitor, which translated well in your shoot in a "back in the saddle"/"like I was never gone" mentality.
Speaking of the shoot, boss as always, I don't think I ever ended up facing you, but I know you could have probably shot holes through me haha.
Again, what I really love to see in RPs is how they pull through with recurring themes or ideas. Be it through a series of events, a singular event, a series of inner monologues, or a bunch of abstract concepts, to have an RP feel like one piece of work really shows its very much like writing a short story.
As I'll be saying to everyone, awesome work, can't wait to see where you take him.
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