Stupid Productions Presents: Fuck, This Was Stupid Feedback

The shoot was excellent, possibly one of the best you've done yet.

The story part was funny, though if I had to point out any flaw, it tended to ramble a little -- and trust me, I spot that first because I see it in my own work all the time. Sometimes you can't help it, that's just how it comes out. TBH, I think you and Carson were pretty evenly matched. His advantage seems to lie in having a bit more backstory to work with, and his focus might have been a little sharper. The more you write, the better your promos are going to be (and they're already fairly good.)

Don't be afraid to experiment with your writing. I have tons of notes full of random scenes and bits of imagined conversations and basically e-fed fanfic, none of which will ever see the light of day, because it's all just for practice. All in all, though, it was a solid promo, and I'm seeing improvement every week, so you're definitely on the right track.