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Post by Sven Alexander on Aug 27, 2016 14:58:24 GMT -6
Character name: Sven Alexander RP Link and Name: Room 4859I had to make a bit of a change to the character to make this work, but i feel like it turned out pretty well. Special thanks to Jack The Crack and theallfather for giving me some great feedback to my last RP, i did my best to work on what you suggested! |
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Post by Spencer Adams on Aug 27, 2016 22:32:33 GMT -6
Solid effort here again. The connection between Sven and Max continues to be enjoyable. My tip again remains to look for ways to flesh out scenes and shoot. I can see some little things that improve and that's always good. Nice job, dude.
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Post by The Hentai Prince on Aug 28, 2016 16:27:50 GMT -6
After reading it, I have to agree with Spence in terms of expanding out ideas. You have all the tools needed to make it big, no doubt! You have a great voice, strong character, very distinct vision. What I suggest is playing around with it. You have established all your tools, now time to twist and stretch them and see what are all the possibilities that come with them! Play around with concepts. You have a real chance on breaking through the ranks and really making something here. Awesome stuff! Keep it up!
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Post by Sven Alexander on Aug 29, 2016 15:16:10 GMT -6
Hey guys, sorry for the late reply.
Just wanted to start off by saying that i appreciate the feedback, but i've been getting the comment about needing to flesh things out for 2 weeks straight now, so i'd love it if someone could give me some directions in how to do that.
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Post by Spencer Adams on Aug 29, 2016 15:34:34 GMT -6
Hey guys, sorry for the late reply. Just wanted to start off by saying that i appreciate the feedback, but i've been getting the comment about needing to flesh things out for 2 weeks straight now, so i'd love it if someone could give me some directions in how to do that. Right, so "flesh out" is a way of saying expand on scenes. You know, look for ways where you can maybe develop some more story and/or character development for Sven and Max. |
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Post by Spencer Adams on Aug 29, 2016 15:35:18 GMT -6
As for "how", it's kinda hard to define since "flesh out" doesn't really mean you're doing anything bad, just to go a bit more in depth.
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